[LMB] Whom do you serve?

Katherine Collett kcollett at hamilton.edu
Thu Oct 13 23:27:04 BST 2016


On Oct 13, 2016, at 6:10 PM, Roberta Wright <ravenenterprises at gmail.com> wrote:
> 
> On Thu, Oct 13, 2016 at 3:27 PM, Katherine Collett <kcollett at hamilton.edu>
> wrote:
> 
>>> 
>>> On Thu, 13 Oct 2016, Lois Bujold wrote a list of phrases to check:
>>> 
>>>> To think that Illyan, whom he’d
>>>> known all his life, whom he’d assumed trusted him implicitly
>> 
>> This second whom is wrong.  Take the clauses apart:  "He'd known him all
>> his life", so him => whom.  But "he'd assumed he trusted him implicitly",
>> so he => who.  You wouldn't say him trusted him.
>>>> 
>> 
>> I think this sentence would be better served with rewording, as all those
> "whom"s, "he"s, and "him"s are confusing.

Yes, probably.

> I would suggest:
>   To think that Illyan, whom Miles had known all his life and assumed
> trusted him implicitly...

But that just sweeps the problem under the rug, so to speak -- the last phrase still technically refers back to the "whom" that doesn't actually work with it grammatically.  A more thorough reworking could work, though.  

Katherine



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