[LMB] Fwd: Fwd: Re: Beta readers wanted!

markus baur baur at chello.at
Wed Feb 5 20:08:52 GMT 2020


next try ..

the file should be attached in this link


Ich habe 1 zu dieser E-Mail gehörende Datei hochgeladen:
* Mari-Nattie Fanfic-SemiFInal.rtf (63,8 KB) hochgeladen auf WeTransfer: 
https://we.tl/t-9oYBGc5Ex2


servus

markus


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Betreff: Fwd: Re: [LMB] Beta readers wanted!
Datum: Wed, 5 Feb 2020 09:51:09 +0100
Von: markus baur <baur at chello.at>
An: Doug Weinfield <douglasw at his.com>

file attached - i have found only one thing i would change in the first 
read through (file format was changed becasue i do not use microsoft 
word) - my comment is in red and marked with ## (easy to find)

i will reread it in a day or so, checking if i find more things to 
comment specifically ..

generally - the story works well as a story

there is not much i comment on the magic / groundsense side of things as 
i have not read too much of the WGW books .. but what i read did not 
work crosswise with your story

there is one thing hoiwever i would like to discuss - the camp is a 
massive collection of people with ground sense .. boith staying there as 
well as coming and going .. a malice (ands are mobile malices not very 
rare and SLOW?) popping up close to a lakewalker camp wouldf be very 
unlikley ..

how about putting the encounter into a bigger distance to the camp? (the 
area close to the camp surely would be rather hunted out, so this would 
also make sense)

a days (or halfdays) travel away perhaps? (hunter goes out in the day, 
overnights in as makeshift camp and uses dusk and dawn to hunt

servus

markus




Am 04.02.2020 um 14:52 schrieb Douglas Weinfield:
> Markus-
> 
> Thank you so very much!
> 
> The fanfic is attached. I look forward to your comments.
> 
> All the best,
> 
> Doug
> 
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "markus baur" <baur at chello.at>
> To: "douglasw" <douglasw at his.com>
> Sent: Monday, February 3, 2020 8:35:01 AM
> Subject: Re: [LMB] Beta readers wanted!
> 
> interested!
> 
> servus
> 
> markus
> 
> Am 03.02.2020 um 14:08 schrieb Doug Weinfield:
>> I’ve written a second fanfic, and I’m looking for a beta reader or two. Please email me directly if you’re interested. This one is is set in the Sharing Knife Universe, a couple of years after “Knife Children”, but focusing on Mari-Nattie....special guest appearances by Fawn, Dag, and Berry!
>>
>> Thanks in advance.
>>
>> Sent from my iPhone
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